"年轻老师与老教师你喜欢那个?"英语作文点评
某中学生英语报社正开展一场题为“Young teachers or elderly teachers，which do you prefer?”
请你依据下面表格所提供的要点写一篇短文，向该报社投稿。
内容:
1.老年教师:教学耐心,讲解细致,经验丰富
2.青年教师:精力充沛,教学活泼,勇于创新
3.阐述你的观点呢?
注意：1．词数100左右，开头语已为你写好，不计入总数；
2．短文必须包含表格的全部内容。要求观点明确，结构合理，紧凑连贯
学生作文1：
Compare with young teachers, I prefer elderly teachers. There are some reasons below.
For one thing, most of elderly teachers are patient in teaching. They not only spare no effort to teach the students, but also give classes carefully .They will do all they can to make the students understand the teaching content. What good teachers! For another thing, elderly teachers are full of teaching experience. This is also the most important, especially for us senior students.
This is only my opinion. I think young teachers are also good.
[名师作文点评]
亮点：1、观点鲜明，词汇句型的运用比较灵活
2、过渡词及连词的使用使文章结构紧凑连贯、条理清楚。
不足之处：1、个别地方的表达需要改进。
1) Compared
2) more
3) try to make the classes lively and interesting
2、审题不全面，忽略了对青年教师这部分信息的处理。这一点是比较大的失误。
学生作文2:
Opinions are divided on this question.
Some students who like the elderly teachers more than the young ones think that
the elderly ones are more patient in teaching, more careful in explaining and also have a
lot of experience.
However, the others have a different opinion. They think the teachers who are young are full of energy. Besides, their teaching is lively and they dare to bring in the new ideas.
Well, in my opinion, I like both the elderly teachers and the young ones because from them we both can learn a lot.
[名师作文点评]
亮点：
1、段落清楚，要点齐全，句式表达比较灵活，能适当运用复句。
2、过渡词运用也比较熟练。
需要改进的地方：
1) prefer the elderly teachers to the young ones
2) with explanations
3) the 去掉
4) The young teachers
Some useful suggestions:
对于英语基础不好的学生，可以这样处理：把所给的材料分为几个点，每个点用1-2句简单句表达出来；而对于英语较好的学生，尽可能地运用一些高级词汇跟适当地运用一些复合句，关键是要表达准确到位。
课后拓展:重点词汇的处理跟运用
1）Elderly teachers have more patience. /They are more patient.
2) Elderly teachers always explain things more carefully.
They are more careful with explanations.
3) Elderly teachers are rich in teaching experience.
They are experienced in teaching. /They have more/rich teaching experience.
4) Young teachers are full of energy. /They have more energy. /They are more energetic.
5) Young teachers’ teaching is more lively. /They can make their classes lively and interesting.
6) Young teachers like to think up/bring in new ideas.
They are more ready to accept or create new ideas.
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